What do I like about this? The shot-in-shot, which is selectively taken off, is a good idea. There's a fair amount of detail in there too (I only watched up to around 1:15).
There are issues though which you'd do well to consider:
- whilst R+P can be largely shared out, the firm guidance of our exam board is that Evals MUST be clearly individuated; this one isn't - you shouldn't answer the Eval Qs as a group
- that doesn't mean you can't collaborate on PLANNING answers tho', or share resources such as screenshots + vid clips
- it does mean your response must be in your voice/words
- a formal script is something to avoid; make detailed notes by all means, but try to avoid reading word-for-word off a script - and certainly don't film yourself doing this!
- these students make some nice points about shot variety - about 0:55 they list some of these; rather than continue with the linear run-through of their video, it would have been much, much better to put stills on screen of the shot-types referred to (from their music vid). The fairly simple approach of commenting over a single play of the vid works reasonably well at AS, with the SEVEN Qs, but isn't really sufficient for the A2's FOUR Qs
- I don't know if they do later on, but its always a good idea SOME self-criticism; no matter how good it is (and every professional would echo this) it could always have been better with more time/resources ... What DON'T you like about your vid? With some distance, what might you change? Your exam Q1a/1b definitely requires such critical objectivity so grab the chance to tease out such points now
- last point is a general one, repeating something I've been trying to hammer home for months: the more time you spend on R+P posts, especially in terms of vodcasts and the stills/clips you've gathered for these (not to mention the comparisons to existing vids + general analysis undertaken) the likelier it is you'll score well on the 20% Eval, AND it'll take you much, much less time. These 4 Qs require vid-based (or other truly multimedia, eg Prezi) responses; pointing a webcam at your own visage is really quite basic 'Use of ICT' in 2012 - you will need extensive materials (stills, clips) to illustrate and bring alive your answers.